Subtle Change
1.Skin stretched taut
Harboring the life beneath
Each day subtle change
2.
Harboring the life beneath
Each day subtle change
2.
The room stands empty
Colour peels off aging walls
My paintbrush beckons
Colour peels off aging walls
My paintbrush beckons
Labels: Haiku, One Deep Breath
posted by hundred and one at 10:06 pm
8 Comments:
It's been quite a while since I was pregnant but still your haiku resonated with me as though it were yesterday...thanks for the lovely reminder.
Also, the contrast of the second one is terrific and written so cleverly.
Great job! The first is so immediate and memorable. I love the image of skin harboring life.
jb
Skin stretched taut
Harboring the life beneath
Each day subtle change
Lovely! Reminds me of a ku I wrote based on a dream:
little footprints raise
on my friend's pregnant belly
a new path
Such fabulous haiku! I remember well that time of pregnancy. And a room needing paintedis a constant attraction for me - I'm always thinking about changing a room's look and paint is the easiest way.
oh wow .. these are amazing, love the contrast between the two ...
I didn't get the link between the the poems until I went back and reread them. Nice.
Loved them both and they bring back great memories. Very creative!
Love both of these and the little snippet they tell.
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